awwyeeahh! Rads doin a comic, rads doing a comic!For flight?Ok, cool page. But I almost feel like you don't need the lower left hand panel. It's almost redundant to have that panel and panel 4 right next to each other. Panel 3 doesn't really give us any more information than panel 4 does.
Hi Jake, in panel 3 he's supposed to be getting hit. In panel 4 he looks at the arrow as if in shock and then in panel 5 he looks at who shot him. Perhaps if I put pupils in panel 4 so it looks like he's looking at the arrow?
this is gorgeous! the pupils would help...i had to go back and look at the panel again. favorite part=the girl flying up in the air when the arrow hits. nice touch.
So I made some slight changes. I put the focus more on the arrow hitting in panel 3. Does that help?
so nice rad, I love your colors
Well, Rad. This is cool. And different. Well done, sir! I award you a pony.
Nice!! Looks so cool! Awesome, in fact. ;) I agree that panels 3 and 4 still feel a bit redundant. Partly because the character is the same size.But I kind of like the idea of losing panel 3 and making the last two panels wide ones. It would give the reader's eye a better direction through the focal points, too.
This is awesome. Everything reads really well, the page is well composed, the poses dynamic. Keep going!
what a great ,great page!!!!!!is it for flight???
Yes, this is for "Flight"
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